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(my first attempt at haiku, so go easy on me!)



Raindrops spreading sound
Upon loosened stricken stones
Scattered in the storm



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The following comments are for "Storm"
by False Dawn

Storms
~FD~
WELL; We are all full of surprises here at Lit.Org
I like it, has a nice stream about it.

{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: September 1, 2003 )

FD
Not entirely sure I liked it. The "loosened stricken stones" sounds off to me.

( Posted by: Washer [Member] On: September 1, 2003 )

Errors?
What grammatical errors? All that's missing is that one comma and that's due to haikus not having grammatical stuff in them. I don't see the problem there :S

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: September 1, 2003 )





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