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Four fishing boats wait
patient as statues
sculpted from salted water








(Author's note: The 17 syllable standard has been adhered to, but I've changed the position of the 7 syllable line.)

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In five hundred years time, most of us will be forgotten dust. But Hitler will still be remembered, God loves irony.


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The following comments are for "Morecambe Bay"
by Ogg

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Liked the way you used the sibilance on Lines 2 & 3, and the "f" noise (there has to be a more sophisticated way of saying that) on Line 1. It's soundarific.

( Posted by: Washer [Member] On: September 1, 2003 )





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