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Falling
Bleeding
Crying
Cursing
Wretched
Sadness
Now
Unfurling.

A fallen angel,
my wings clipped.
From the cup of evil
I have sipped.

Shouting
Screaming
Silent
Weeping
Angel?
Demon?
I know
not what.

Clothed in sadness,
my soul shattered.
My world broken
my body battered.

Fading
Tiring
Laying
Sleeping
Dreaming
Resting
Fleeting
Waking

Angel of evil,
Wings of black.
Strength restored
but light I lack.


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I think sigs are dumb.


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The following comments are for "Fallen"
by Sub

so sad yet so beutiful
loved the way the words just flowed together, and to have them rhyme! i cant, so thats why it is cool to me. love the mood to, very cool.

( Posted by: soulblade [Member] On: August 28, 2003 )

very nice
I enjoyed the variation of the stanzas and the interesting rythmn that created.

sadly beautiful

( Posted by: SinamonAngel [Member] On: August 29, 2003 )





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