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Posted: Sun Aug 10, 2003 5:16 pm Post subject:


Improper Spacing Ref: CHALLENGE ACCEPTED

Improper spacing
final frontiering
Improper spacing
final frontiering
scratching around
for a logical way
to end this poem
in the tradition
of Spikus Milligan
sensational view
sensual dew
haven't a clue
what these metaphors mean
still no end in sight
losing control
my fingers gone rogue
save yourselves while you can
no hope for me
will hold off the thesauric
forces of daftness
as long as one is able
to end one's career, going out with a bang
stiff upper lip, all that kerchang
to be remembered as a fable
urban myth, or urban mythtake
only way to go
now, to pull the plug.....................

In five hundred years time, most of us will be forgotten dust. But Hitler will still be remembered, God loves irony.

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The following comments are for "Improper Spacing"
by Ogg

you know, this poem reminds me of the siren poem, only because in that poem it lures you to continue reading. i really like this poem, the ending is apprupt but not like "hey, what happened!?". and, the flow of words, gotta love it.

( Posted by: soulblade [Member] On: September 6, 2003 )

cool ogg
Very nice ogg sorry that I have'nt commented on your stuff in awhile I have been going threw a hard time. I really enjoyed this good work my pal.

( Posted by: lovesessence [Member] On: September 7, 2003 )

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