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_Worrying About Death_

I was worrying about death and feeling a little down,
So I went to the circus to laugh at a clown.
But a fortune teller's tent I passed on the way,
So I stopped at her table to hear what she'd say.

She promised me long life, beauty and health,
A car and a family, and surrounded by wealth.
I was delighted to think that I'd live to be old,
And the prospect of money made me all the more bold.

But I couldn't help listening to the cynic within,
So I went to a doctor for a second opinion.
He gave me a check-up and charged me a fee,
And said "Not to worry, you look healthy to me."

Then I visited my parents and gave them a kiss
And when I'd finished my story they said I'd be missed;
They didn't know if I'd really live long,
But they would prefer me to die after they'd gone.

My dilemma was growing - I was less and less sure
About when to be expecting Death's knock upon the door.
I'd sit up all night with fear in my soul,
Just waiting and listening to hear that bell toll.

I was feeling so bad that I went to a shrink:
He said I should come back at least once a week.
He diagnosed my illness but said "There's no hope
Of me being able to cure you before making you broke."

Yet I have to admit I still wasn't convinced,
So I went to the church and spoke with a priest.
He laughed when I told him, and said "Yes, you're right:
You are going to die... though I don't think tonight."

He said it was common to worry about death,
Because it happens to all of us; even the best.
The secret, he said, is to remember that this
Is part of the journey, and not all that there is.

Spudley Strikes Again

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The following comments are for "Worrying About Death"
by Spudley

Only the GOOD die young!
I'm sure you don't have a thing to worry about! Loved this...Hallmark would be proud! I only have one suggestion, the rhythm would flow better if you changed it to "Death's knock ON the door instead of upon. Other than that, that's my kind of humor!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: August 24, 2003 )

this really made me laugh. and just after i was getting ready to shoot myself from reading some of the other stuff on the site.not really a big fan of rhyme, personally, but have recently been led to see that it can be good. it certainly fits perfectly here. funny.

here's a suggestion:

you might want to write something that's bad so i can complain about it and feel better!

really, you're a welcome break from a little too much pessimism. nothing wrong with expressing all feelings, but i like happy stuff too.

my appreciation,


( Posted by: chop_n_change [Member] On: September 5, 2003 )

Thank you all for the kind words. :) I'm glad I was able to make you laugh.

Bea - on/upon: I actually toyed with both these several times when writing the poem before I settled on 'upon'. The rhythm does work either way, depending how you place the emphasis, but re-reading it now, I think I agree with you that 'on' would have been better.

c&c - on rhymes: I don't use rhymes all the time, but I have used them a fair bit. Without going back and counting, I'd say about half my poems here on are rhymed.
That's not to say I try to write rhymed poems; it's just how they've come to me at the time. :)
Re writing something bad so you can complain - hehehe.... I'll try. ;-D
(muahahah! you have no idea what you'd started!!)

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: September 5, 2003 )

never fear rhyming man!
a certain rcallaci seems to be helping me to see the charm of using rhyme in the right places. just always had this vision of high-school rhyming poetry which puts me off. is true that some uses of rhyme by more experienced writers on this site do work very well. can't be denied that use of rhyme here in this poem works without doubt. it seems to almost mock those examples of rubbish rhyming poetry in a style which i find hilarious.

it's just i need to complain about something, it's in my evil nature! so there!


( Posted by: chop_n_change [Member] On: September 5, 2003 )

Great intuitive thinking process in and thru it all...
A couple rhyming least to my ears. But all in all...
very clever, and even whimsical.

( Posted by: C.L. Mareydt [Member] On: October 3, 2003 )

a little humour
Great poem with a rhythemic pattern that makes our reading more enjoyable. A simple poem with some humour to the truth. :) Great! I like it. :)
ps. Thx for your comment on my short story. :)

( Posted by: ^white [Member] On: October 28, 2003 )

rhythm & rhyme
I think that the almost-doggerel rhythm and rhyme of this piece are part of its charm - it bids us not take the worry too seriously, while hustling us along in precisely the way of such worrisome thoughts. Distinctly charming.

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: November 5, 2003 )

your writing was so funny, I'm impressed....obviously you have amuch darker side....Morganth

( Posted by: Morganth [Member] On: December 21, 2003 )

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