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I knew there would have to come a day,
when you would smile and walk away.
I knew you'd make this journey,
without me by your side.

I knew this time would come,
invade me in my heart and home.
Tear you away from my life,
and you won't hear me scream for you.

I feel so weary, tired and cold,
so confused and so alone.
Feeling that love is in the past,
you tell me what we have ain't meant to last.

I shudder as I think about starting anew,
tears come when I realize it won't be with you.
Telltale signs of heartbreak cross my face,
and you sit simply and wipe the tears away.

I do understand that you must go,
time doesn't stop for love, I know.
But why must you quit without a try,
why will this romance end in goodbye?

These puzzles consume me night and day,
and now no one wipes my tears away.
My heartbeat quickens with somebody new,
then it drops cause I realize...he isn't you.

"God grant me distraction."

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The following comments are for "The Distance of a Breath"
by Darkshine Raven

Very musical. Rings true of love.:)

( Posted by: lovesessence [Member] On: August 13, 2003 )

For some reason when I started writing this, I didn't mean to make it so rythmical, but it just kinda turned out that way. I'm glad. And yes, the writing was inspired by a very deep love I was lucky enough to witness...

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: August 13, 2003 )

Raven, this is a gorgeous piece of work. I can find hardly a fault, believe me - I try! *grin*. Maybe, just one, teeny thing - told you I was a trying git! Third stanza, last line, in the midst of some lovely lyrics you say 'ain't' - would 'isn't' fit better?

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: August 13, 2003 )

Darkshine Raven; I must say, I enjoyed reading your poem.


( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: August 13, 2003 )

It's funny you should mention that "ain't" in there because I was actually thinking about changing that myself. However, this poem was written for a certain group of people and the ain't in there really fits them. So, it's kinda referencing them, you know? But,'re right it would flow more smoothly with "isn't" in there. Thanks you guys so much for your appreciation! =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: August 13, 2003 )

Just had to stop and say i loved it. Great rythym and rhyme. The kind of thing i try to write...

( Posted by: shadazar [Member] On: August 15, 2003 )

thanks again
Thank you shadazar, I'm sure that you have some good work yourself. I just got lucky this time! =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: August 15, 2003 )

Time Fits the Groove
time hits a groove for love...
until the music stops

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: July 30, 2016 )

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