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From the Depths of Hell I rode,
Battered and unshod,
Too weary to speak anger,
Too tired to feel unloved.

Down the stretch of Styx I strode,
Beaten and forlorn.
A well of water in my eye,
My heart still dark, still torn.

Past the growls of Hounds I crowed,
For the love I lost.
O Orpheus! I know your pain!
Gone! Gone! Forever gone!
Always and forever gone!

An imprinted hand across my face,
Ending my fate beyond the Gates of Hell.

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The following comments are for "Beyond The Gates Of Hell"
by False Dawn

Hells Bells
I like it FD good job.

( Posted by: lovesessence [Member] On: August 10, 2003 )

'Within these
confines, cry "Havoc" and let slip the dogs of war, that this foul deed shall smell above the earth.' You sound in a Shakespearan mood, FD. This is good old fashioned bard stuff. Brilliant.

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: August 13, 2003 )

I can see where you are coming from in the bardic style. I guess that always comes out when you're trying to tell a story through poetry using a set rhyming structure. Glad you liked it Ogg and Lovessence

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 16, 2003 )

It's good to see a structured poem with references to trational works, Mythology is a great weapon to thrust the theme. Good use of rythmn too...

( Posted by: Steve Murphy [Member] On: September 17, 2003 )

It was an experiment, this poem, to see if I could work mythology into any of my work. I'm a great fan of mythological works, and I like the tale of Orpheus and his lost love.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: September 17, 2003 )

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