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A kiss like this could only come, from the lady of the Nile, who loves to play with kings and knights, behind the dungeon wall, where no one will know that she's there.
She sleeps with them all, and laughs about it, because no one knows.

Sailing down The Nile, the men all wave,because they all got laid.
She is a damsel , yet not in distress , she guides their minds to sex.


------
Cynthia R. Yildirim

*~Love is the hidden element~*

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The following comments are for "Nile Play"
by LovesEssence

Nile
Lovesessence; I liked this poem
very intense though.

{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: August 9, 2003 )

*grinz*
We Women have such beautiful wiles dont We? *giggles* This was alot of fun to read!

( Posted by: SinamonAngel [Member] On: August 9, 2003 )

original
different than I'm used to.
I like that

( Posted by: GhosTRunner [Member] On: August 9, 2003 )

thanks
Thank-you all for your good comments.

( Posted by: lovesessence [Member] On: August 9, 2003 )

9
One of your best, yet, Renee. I see you stuck your guns re: the last line and I stand by what I said, grrrr! lol. Anyway it's a minor point and I still think it's a terrific poem.

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: August 10, 2003 )

something different
Different, unexpected, unusual.

I struggled with the flow of the piece a bit in places, but overall I think it's a good idea, well executed.

Score 8/10.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: August 10, 2003 )

She can't be Cleopetra
And She ruled over Pharaonic society.

( Posted by: HedErotic_String [Member] On: February 10, 2004 )





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