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Erin,

You're not here tonight.
I look to the chair,
where you curl up with the kittens,
to watch tv and comfort me,
just being there.

I don't hear the noises you make,
your laugh, your soothing voice.
I hear the silence, the cold quiet,
of being alone, totally alone,
while you're gone.

I crawl into bed, and reach for you,
but your pillow is cold and empty.
I can smell you on our blanket, in our bed.
But I can't feel you, your warm touch,
I miss you.

Hurry home.

-Chris

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Chrispian H. Burks
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by Chrispian

Interesting if a little cliche
I like the raw feelings in this - it really makes the poem what it is. The only thing I would say is that its not original in any way, because so many writers have written about this. Something makes me wonder in this too - is she gone for a small length of time or indefinitely? I think its the second but you leave it suitably ambiguous to make the reader wonder. good work.

Btw, as you are editor, can you explain why none of my poems want to get published? I've had one sitting there a week and a half...

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 3, 2003 )

re: cliche
Indeed this subject has been covered many times and it's not really meant for poetic expression - She was gone the weekend recently and I wrote this for her while I was up late I can never sleep when she's gone. She loved it and I had flowers waiting on her when she got back ;)

As for your poems, if you'll notice when you submit there is a message stating we have a bit of a backlog problem. I'm working through them at about 10 a day (10 poems and 10 stores).. It's actually starting to get reasonable, but we still have a ways to go.

( Posted by: Chrispian [Admin] On: August 3, 2003 )

Romantic
*smiling sigh* Nice gesture :) I'm sure she would have loved this poem, though I think it is probably much too personalised to do well in an open market. But I can understand that its only for personal use.

As for the backlog, how is it then, that some writers seem to have poems up every day whereas I haven't been able to clear one at all? I just didnt understand it, thats all.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 3, 2003 )

re: backlog
We validated them in the order they came in.. Some people post 3 or 4 at a time, though we don't validate more than one a day. You bring up a good point though, and we've been discussing out to remedy it. I look at the options today but I think we may switch to validating by author (then by date) rather by date (then by author). We've talked about this before but I just didn't see it as clearly until you put it the way you did! I'm on it. ;)

( Posted by: Chrispian [Admin] On: August 3, 2003 )

Thanks
You know, its refreshing that mods/administrators actually listen to problems that their members have found. I've been to so many sites where nothing gets done for ages that its nice to see an almost instant result here. Keep up the good work, Crowe, in writing and in making this place better for us who are glad to be posting here.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 3, 2003 )

Unabashedly Tender!
Chris, that was absolutely beautiful. It's lovely to see a MAN write so personally and share it with all of us.
Erin is indeed a lucky girl!

Most of my poems (unpublished here) are of that genre...my kids call it my sappy period. But unfortunately, mine does not have a happy ending like yours! It's interesting, how the same words can come from two different perspectives...mine grief, and yours from a temporary longing, certain of a happy outcome.

Would that all of us had that result.
Good work Chris!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: August 3, 2003 )

Crowe// your boo
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!. How sweet of you
crow, to miss your honey! Loved it.

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: August 4, 2003 )

A joke?
Crowe,

While I appreciate your harsh tongue and unfounded accusations of "playing games," with all the thought and reason both suggest, I must say that jumping to conclusions is not only irresponsible, but irritating as well.

My partner and I share a home, a life, a computer, and an email address. If our lifestyle of "sharing" offends you, that's one thing. To use such offense as a basis for threatening behaviour is another. Or perhaps you're just jumping to conclusions again.

Please be more thoughtful in the future.

Thanks,

BH

( Posted by: Boy Howdy [Member] On: September 19, 2003 )

You are mistaken
Your jumping to conclusions now. I know nothing about your lifestyle - and could care less. It has NOTHING to do with me, nor my site. I only care about the site, and everyone here knows it.

My reference is to you, Boy Howdy and Bigyellowmonkey running around posting like it's some sort of tag team game where you follow each other around. My communts about sharing one account was not directed at those two usernames. I sent and email about the two usernames sharing an account - in fact there are more than two usernames under that email address and account.

Then, you find a topic that has nothing to do with it and comment here, instead of on the piece where I commented to you.

I'm going to ask one more time, nicely, Please respect this site, the way it is intended to be used and play nice. I'm not asking you do do anything special, just keep on topic and if you want to make quips at friends do that elsewhere. I have no problem with that - this is just the wrong venue for it.

If you want to discuss it further, email me and I'll be happy to talk about it.

-Chris

( Posted by: Chrispian [Admin] On: September 19, 2003 )

ahhh
Ahhh, without hypocrites the world would be a boring place, would it not. I'd love to email you to discuss this further. I'll just post your initial comment in to show you the difference between jumping to conclusions and drawing logical conclusions. It ain't subtle.

What's your address?

( Posted by: Boy Howdy [Member] On: September 19, 2003 )

Forgot . . .
Anyway, in all my irritation, I completely forgot to comment on your poem -- which is ostensibly what we readers are supposed to do, correct? So here goes . . .

I quite enjoyed it. Althopugh your sentiments are strong, they're expressed simply and directly without mangling or mawkishness.

The first stanza, especially, is powerful for what it alludes to, but doesn't state outright -- that even were she not speaking to you, even if the two of you were fighting, you'd still feel better if she were with you, curled up in her chair. You're contentment begins with her presence, but deepens with intimacies of touch and speech.

A moving poem. Thanks for writing it.

Word.

( Posted by: Boy Howdy [Member] On: September 19, 2003 )

Please
I emailed you about this yesterday before I posted about it on the site. My email address is crowe@lit.org - take your issues to email please.

( Posted by: Chrispian [Admin] On: September 19, 2003 )





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