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The Cigarette Butt

Sometimes, I feel like a single, lonely cigarette butt lying in a gutter on a summer day. It has just rained, and while the asphalt dries quickly the gutter remains soggy. For one minute, I may have been cherished, enjoyed even, by some trashy teenager. Next, I am the trash. Or maybe I was hated, an indifferent reminder of something you canít get rid of. Either way, after I have served my purpose I am forgotten.

There are days when I canít help but feel that I will amount to spare change. Always around in your pocket, where no one can see me. Left in glass jars or between the cracks, collecting filth. Completely ordinary and nothing exciting like the big bucks. A minor annoyance to everyone. I probably wonít even be shiny.

It rains too much. My dreams are waterlogged. I think my hopes are beginning to mildew. And no one wants to be around that smell.




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The following comments are for "The Cigarette Butt"
by Virtex

do we comment on these?
this is very deep, the best description od feelings i have read in a long time.
can i use this for my next psycho?

( Posted by: man eating maniac [Member] On: August 1, 2003 )

impressive
It's not poetry, but it had the same ring to it that a lot of good poetry does.

I especially liked the last paragraph. Wow. Amazingly succinct, and such precision in pin-pointing the problem. I would say it'd make a good tagline... but it's just too good for that. :-)

Score 9/10.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: August 1, 2003 )





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