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Holding

A grip on the world
All we own
We cling to
To what we have
What we know
What we feel
We hold on
So tight
We canít
Let
Go
Try so hard
Then.
A crack
We start to slip
It starts to bend
It starts to warp
We start to slide
Then.
Shift around
Compensate
Understand
Re-align
DEAL
Then.
It all explodes
It shatters
Itís pieces
Itís nothing
And we
We float
We fall
Away



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The following comments are for "Holding"
by shadazar

Very Musical
I like this it would make a great alternative song. Already is an awsome poem. I like how you trickled the words down slowly. I love this part...

Then.
Shift around
Compensate
Understand
Re-align
DEAL

Very cool.

( Posted by: lovesessence [Member] On: August 5, 2003 )

Then
Great one word lines in there which really add to the poem, and the way it falls away at the end is superbly done. Good poem.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 5, 2003 )

sweet
I like this poem, it's got an interesting scheme to it. The organization of the words is very nicely done. Good job!

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: August 15, 2003 )

thank you
Thank you all, the really amazing thing, i think, is that i never really think about things like organization of words. i just kinda write stuff down. i think about the rythym, but that's really it. thanks again, everyone.

( Posted by: shadazar [Member] On: August 15, 2003 )





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