Sans cessation
by Idomis (Member) - published: August 3, 2003
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I have been drowned.
A questionable sea of emptiness.
Longing in the space of dreams.
Damning whirlpools of listlessness.
Gasping for the unknown yonder.
Against the bludgeoning fate.

I saw the flotsam. Not in my dreams --
But hope.

I am holding on to this "drifting."
Row, move, vanquish the waves!

One day, I won't be wet anymore.

------
Be daring, be different, be impractical, be anything that will assert integrity of purpose and imaginative vision against the play-it-safers, the creatures of the commonplace, the slaves of the ordinary. -- Sir Cecil Beaton (1904-1980) English photographer

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The following comments are for "Sans cessation"
by Idomis

French...
I'm not entirely sure that your title is grammatically correct, yknow. I think it would be "sans cesser", because correct me if i'm wrong, but isn't it always the verb in the infinitive after sans? I think this sounds better and more french than the title you have.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 3, 2003 )

Non-French Comment
I am sorry to say that cesser is not an English word and one can never find it in any known existing English dictionary.

Cessation, rather means, a temporary or final ceasing (as of action) : STOP -- From Merriam Webster (www.m-w.com)

;)

( Posted by: idomis [Member] On: August 4, 2003 )

French again
You mean the title isnt meant to be french? It's just the word "sans" means without in french, and well, if you're going to use a technically french word, you should do it all correctly. "cesser" is to stop in french and it would mean the same thing as your title does now, it'd just be gramatically correct.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 4, 2003 )

Hi
Hey don't mind FD. Sure you can make up words or alternate words to fit your poem where does everyone thing new words come from anyway. They are created out of need.
So I say keep it like it is and let the world ride your wave for awhile.
I like this piece very good.

( Posted by: lovesessence [Member] On: August 5, 2003 )

French
Yeah, but I'm sure the French wouldn't be too happy if an American (I'm assuming) started messing with their language! I'm sure you wouldnt if a french person tried to invent new english words.

I prefer "sans cesser" anyway. It sounds much more poetic to me.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 5, 2003 )

Butting out
To assume makes an ASS out of U and ME. Poetry is not a conformed genre where grammar is even a bit important.

By the way, it's not your poetry. Sure, call it whatever you want.

As for you, don't assume too much. I am neither French nor American. ;)

( Posted by: idomis [Member] On: August 6, 2003 )

Even so
Being part french, I know for a fact that the french people would not like you messing with their language. Your own language, yes, that's ok, but I don't think you're allowed the liberty of doing it to someone else's language. It just makes you seem uncultured and makes the ass outta you instead :P

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 6, 2003 )

On creative license
Ok I've been reading these comments for a while and now that the word "ass" is being freely applied to any and everyone in sight, I feel the need to step in.

We're bordering on name calling over a minor point of poetic license. While I completely agree with FD that making up words is somewhat pretentious, I do agree that Idomis is more than welcome to do so as he chooses.

The point here is that as writers we should all be thankful when someone takes the time and effort to read AND comment on our work. If you don't like a piece of advice you are given simply ignore it. There's really no need to get defensive and take it criticism as a personal attack.

With that said, try to keep it friendly.

~Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: August 6, 2003 )

Making up words
I'm all for making up words, sure, but the thing is, in a different language? You can't just mess with the grammar of another language just because you feel like it. That's considered very offensive to anyone, and being part french, i do take offence to the language being changed and messed about with by someone who probably cant even speak it! Sorry if its me being stupid, but its something i feel strongly about. Make it up in english all you like, but if you can't do the french, don't write the title as french.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 6, 2003 )

Maintaining Equilibrium
Everything point well taken and wisely said. It may be a personal bias to use the English language in my poems, but frankly, I don't have any intention "to mess up" such "grammatical error" of the poem's title as pointed out by FD. No way, either, that I considered the whole poem's title "offensive," as to its change of syntax.

Well, let's put a stop to this, by perhaps, changing the subject to "Stop Me Not Poem." Any suggestions for a change of title so we won't trigger much trivial debate here?

( Posted by: idomis [Member] On: August 7, 2003 )

Sans Cesser
It means the same thing, it's just correct in french.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 7, 2003 )

hmm so what ?
j'aime bien �a. ne t'inqui�te pas de FD.

c'est moi, grimmy. :)

( Posted by: penumbra [Member] On: August 19, 2003 )

[stair case] clear
Hello, mon ami! Glad to know you have found this writing niche. Keep on writing!

( Posted by: idomis [Member] On: August 19, 2003 )

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