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God's echo;

I see you fall, fall
I see you fly. fly
I see you live, live
I see you die. die

I wish I told, told
I wish you knew. knew
That life is hard, hard
But inspiring, too. too

You'll make it back, back
To your feet. feet
They'll carry you off, off
Now more fleet. fleet

Jesus loves you. you
He knows who you are. are
You are one of His. His




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BVA: IU-4


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The following comments are for "God's echo"
by GhosTRunner

For real; GhosTRunner
Yes, He knows All

{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: August 7, 2003 )

Repetition
Sorry, but i found the repetition irritating and useless. I mean, what was it meant to achieve to the actual meaning of the poem?

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 7, 2003 )

:D
Hey I made it! I didn't find the repetitions annoying. It just all depends on how you read it.
It's got a good message too.

( Posted by: NuttyGummy [Member] On: August 8, 2003 )

i have to agree with 'FD'
keep it to just the once and it will be fine.
other than that, good piece.

( Posted by: man eating maniac [Member] On: August 8, 2003 )

tks
Very interesting no matter how it is read. Liked it both ways and it carries through on its own. Only critical point is, it could have continued and had a stronger ending. All in all, well done.

( Posted by: C.L. Mareydt [Member] On: August 10, 2003 )

Edit
Yes, I understand its called God's echo and thats why the repetition is there, i just dont understand how the message justifies such an echo.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 11, 2003 )





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