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“A Former Immigrant Juvenile's Feelings and Views on Race and Color in America”

*(This sonnet more or less summarizes my memories and feelings of growing up in the South in America as a half-white, half-Vietnamese boy raised by an African-American, soldier step-father and a Vietnamese mother during the 1970's era after emigrating from South Vietnam as the Vietnam War still raged on.).

During the '70's, deep in the South,
I was white but raised black by a black man.
As a boy, I have watched the Ku Klux Klan
on the news—and was frightened as a youth
who was “black.” In those times, it was uncouth
and a mark of disgrace to be less than
the child of a white mother and white man:
even back then I felt that racist truth.
Two-score years have passed and I’m still confused,
troubled, and unclear as to what or how
I should be: am I white—or “black” (abused
by my black "dad," I relate to him now—.)?
It’s joyless being me—unhinged like this:
but feeling more black, I hate prejudice.


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The following comments are for ""Make America Great Again""
by Apple

Your sonnet
You seem to be trying to write a Spenserian sonnet. Your meter is all over the place. Either regularize it into iambic or tetrameter meter so that it reads cleaner. It is important that you enjamb your lines properly as well. Free verse in form does not a sonnet make. Best wishes.

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: June 19, 2020 )

Re: Your sonnet
My metre is perfect, williamhill. However, it is your sense of (other poet's) metre that is questionable, in my opinion. I suggest you audit or invest in a local college course in prosody. And then check (my metre) again. Before you try to undermine real poet's reputations (out of feelings of envy and/or resentment). And, in the process, make a fool of yourself for the entire World Wide Web to see and ridicule (in the privacy of their own homes, businesses, offices, etc.). Best regards. "Apple."

( Posted by: Apple [Member] On: June 22, 2020 )

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