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their hearts
ripened
with
love
oh
young lovers
we are
both
hearts ticking
and
appetites
filled
with
ordinary light


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The following comments are for "Both Hearts Ticking"
by FireFly747

ordinary light
i quite like this brief poem. Ordinary light.. why did you use that at the end? isn't love extraordinary? just intrigued

( Posted by: Shaza89 [Member] On: August 30, 2017 )





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