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Darkness and a kiss.
Consumes my soul.
Into the oblivion.
Back from the abyss.

My soul carries on again.
Through nothingness road.
Toward love and light.
Hoping this time is the "when".




------
-- Stacey


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by Dolphingurrl

Dark??
I had to read this a couple of times before I got it. First read and it seems a little dark and gloomy. It almost has a sense of despiration about it. It isn't until you get to the last time that you see that it is really about looking for love and the light at the end of a dark dank tunnel. Really have to let it sink into you to get the meaning. Good work.

( Posted by: wrath186 [Member] On: July 27, 2003 )

When?
This looks like it was written following a heartbreak or some such event. An interesting mix of darkness and hope, though I have to question your use of "when". I know what you're aiming at - that time when you find your one true love - but i dont think the word "when" incapsulates this idea as fully as you would like. Apart from that, great poem.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: July 27, 2003 )





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