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Chosen-ness brings mastery as a mother does fetus
we jews persist because the nazis complete us
Hitler, to this day, defines the rules of immigration
for Poles to enter the nazionist jewish nation

And daily they jail those innocents who dare
to question the tale and lay open bare
the figures and facts, the names and the dates
evidence of the acts and who perpetrates

but no, only steel bars await the confessors
who handle well the wars and finger their investors
maybe we should just live and let the dead lie
baby would forgive and forget the real reasons why

for knowing full well the pain to be imparted
through slanders and shame and the deaths uncharted
a destructive ridicule awaits the pure-hearted
and only a real fool would join the dearly departed

We would all love to live in a world of free speech
where minds freely give and all receive from each
and all the human races, unhindered, do reach
and extend an embrace that a child's mind could teach

according to gods words, jews are almost priests
but we can't play the lords and behave worse than beasts
we can't show others the famed brutality we endured
and shoot our brothers casually just to feel secured.

As long as the holocaust defines today's jew
there will always be a cost for me to know you
I am not free to be what we want me to see
cause tied to this tree i'm right where they want me.

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The following comments are for "Chosen-ness"
by Tamir

History Bound
Powerful piece of writing...

I do encourage you to add many defining stanzas that will tie the entire piece together other than the end.

When i was reading, i felt lost and confused or wondering what the hell are you saying, then the end tied the entire piece together and it made sense, but if you had breaks of understanding in between each "Time History points of art" it would tie each break together and then one final punch at the pint to bring it home for me... my thought and cheers, i understood the writing but, to the general public i feel it may be lacking the ADD attention to keep a reader engaged. -Chris

( Posted by: NucleusFire [Member] On: February 23, 2017 )

Thank you, Chris :)
Good advice

( Posted by: Tamir [Member] On: June 12, 2017 )

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