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Yes, Sex Education should belong in school. We have some very evil people in
this world today, that will go as far as molesting a baby up to an adult.
And one of the things is that young girls are becoming mature in size and ending up pregnant. But not realizing that having sex can be fatal. A person
can contract a deadly disease from someone. Children are raising children in this generation, and parents are not trying to prevent it from happening.
Some parents are giving their approval for a child ranging from age nine to
fifteen to be on birth control pills. That's like handling them a dose of
poison. Parents doesn't realize, by doing that is taking away a child
virginity. Children need to be children, and adults need to play their role
as parents. Now a days, children are telling the parents what to do. It is
just sad.
Molestation, plays a big part in a child's life also. It gives the offender a chance to rape or attack a child, or a teenager. Children doesn't realize
that having Sex Education in school is very important. There are people out
there whether it is an adult, a teenager, that will molest them, and make them
do things aganist their will. They need to know what to expect if someone approaches them in the wrong way, or say something out of the way to them about sex. Sometimes, it's someone who the child knows or respect. It could be a friend of the family, a brother, sister, uncle, cousin, mother, even a father.
You will be surprise of most of the attackers are people who they know....There
are some that children do not know, and will trap them into thinking that they care or love them. but again, we have perverts out there, and children need to
be aware of this.
Pregnancy, plays another big role in a child's life. There are so many
children in this world today, who are getting pregnant. Most of the young girls are ranging from nine years old and up these days. Parents are putting their
daughters on birth control earlier and earlier. It is wrong, but it saves the child from becoming pregnant. Young girls need to know the complications of
being pregnant. And, the responsibility that comes with it of becoming a young mother. Some children don't even survive to see the birth of their child. Sometimes, the mother and baby have a fatal death. Sometimes, the baby doesn't make it. Children has to realize that sometimes a mother who have serious complications goes into a coma. Some come out of the coma, and there are others
who do not make it. But by the grace of "God" some survive. Children need to know also, there are a lot of diseases out in the world. Every one who you meet, whether it is a youn guy, or young girl. It will be impossible to tell
someone you have a disease. One of the most kept secrets by people who are afraid to be honest, but rather pass the disease on to the other mate.
Children need to know that having sex is not the joy of the world. A person can catch different types of diseases, such as Aids (number #1 killer)
disease in the world. etc. It can cause a sympathetic nervous system. A disease
can even be fatal. Little girls, and teenag girls need to know that they can loose their virginity as well as their life. They need guidance, and someone who could direct their paths, and to care for them. Having Sex Education taught
in schools are an eye opener to some parents. It gives both the boys and girls the knowledge and wisdom of what to expect and not to expect. It also can save lives. It can make you wise or not wise. It can give you a lot of understanding. Beware of our young children these days in this generation. Time is movong too fast. We as parents can only hope and pray that our children will use good judgment. Listening is the key word, and learning from teachers,parents,or anyone who is willing to take time out and talk with our young folks.




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"If we will seek the counsel of the One who keeps us, and not of our own understanding; Then we would accomplish much, much more" - ~Jeannie Simpson~







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The following comments are for "Sex Education Does It Belongs In School"
by JEANNIE45

Um
Grammar and spelling were atrocious. In this modern wonderland of MS Word, F7 is all you need to know. Spell check that sucker.

Two mistakes were present in the title itself. A donut to whomsoever finds one. An e-donut. There should be a colon after Education. Sorry. Ruined one of the prizes already.

"Children has" was used numerous times.

You mentioned : "It can cause a sympathetic nervous system." Unfortunately, billions of us have already contracted this, which is defined as, "The part of the autonomic nervous system originating in the thoracic and lumbar regions of the spinal cord that in general inhibits or opposes the physiological effects of the parasympathetic nervous system, as in tending to reduce digestive secretions, speeding up the heart, and contracting blood vessels."
-dictionary.com

This could have been structured better. You illustrate the points moderately well, but you don't mention that if a person is inclined to have sex, and they don't know procedure for safe sex, then pregnancy for the female partner is practically implied, and that one of the purposes of Sex Ed. is to ensure that if sex happens, it happens in a setting that isn't conducive to making problems later on the way. Someone will pounce on me for that line, but yes, to a teenager, children would be problems. They're problems. It's out there, it's said, I'm not taking it back. Those little buggers freak me out.

And this is only my opinion, but if a girl between 15 and 18 is going to have sex one way or another, just give her the pills. Younger = just weird. If you're a good parent and all that stuff, your children will never engage in premarital sex, will go to church every Sunday, and will never paintball the annoying neighbors on Halloween. But this is real life, and if it's going to happen, make it safe.

( Posted by: Washer [Member] On: July 19, 2003 )

Three Mistakes
There are actually three mistakes in the title - the lack of a colon, the unnecessary "s" after belong, and the complete lack of a question mark too. But let's not be pedantic!

I lost interest in this after the first few lines. Labelling people as "evil" really didn't do anything for me. I felt almost patronised as you tried to explain the subject.

The subject itself, however, is one which probably should be (and has been in the UK) addressed fully, due to the enormous amount of unwanted teenage pregnancies. The solution is simple in my eyes, though. Take a leaf out of Holland's book. They have the lowest teenage pregnancy rate in Europe, I believe. They've achieved that all through making people aware of the dangers of unprotected sex, and I think it would be a good idea to follow their example.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: July 19, 2003 )

WELL
UM:
FIRST OF ALL, MY PAPER WAS GRADED IN COLLEGE BY MY INSTRUCTOR, AND I RECEIVED AN A. SO IT REALLY DOESN'T MATTER WHAT YOU SAY. I WROTE THIS FROM MY HEART, BUT EVERYONE HAS AN OPINION

GOD BLESS YOU ANY WAY DAHLIN
JEANNIE

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: July 19, 2003 )

PLEASE
FALSEDAWN:
THAT NAME REALLY RING A BELL. BUT,AS I WAS TELLING UM, IT WAS GOOD ENOUGH FOR MY INSTRUCTOR IT WAS GOOD ENOUGH FOR ME. 2 MAYBE 3
MISTAKES IS NOT BAD,. BUT PEOPLE
HAVE THEIR RIGHT TO THEIR OWN OPINIONS, SO GOD BLESS YOU SUGAR, NO
HARD FEELINGS WHATSO EVER. DO NOT GRUDGE AGANIST ONE ANOTHER

JEANNIE

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: July 19, 2003 )

Two or Three
In the title, that was. But I'm not pedantic. I was just saying that in response to Washer who mentioned it.

Being British, I don't understand college at all, but I think its the equivalent of our universities over here. I must say that I am quite surprised you received an A because your style just really didn't make me wanna read. I don't know what you said in the rest of the piece past the first few lines, purely because I was so put off. For all I know, it could have been wonderful and excelling in the main body of the text, but just for future reference, you may want to improve your style somehow. Maybe write in longer sentences and don't treat your audience like children. Saying "there are evil people in the world" is not going to gain you respect for your writing technique in the world of literature, I'm afraid. Please understand that I'm only saying this so that you can better yourself. The subject itself is one which I agree needs to be investigated, but you have to use language as an ally more. Otherwise, you will gain no support for your argument.

One last thing: why oh why do you write in capitals? I ask merely for information...

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: July 19, 2003 )

Disgust
Unrelated note: False Dawn, the phrase 'I ask merely for information' is almost universally terrifying.

Jeannie. You have just stated, in these exact words: 'It doesn't matter what you say'

If this is so, what in the name of heaven or hell made you post it to this site? This is a website designed to allow persons to submit literary material for perusal and critique. What you have just said violates any and all purpose you may have had in submitting the piece in the first place.

There is no room on this site for your cheerful, blaring self-righteousness. If, to you, what others say does not matter, I urge you strongly to get lost. Fast.

There is nothing here for you.

( Posted by: Beckett Grey [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

Reward
Beckett Grey; God is good. Your reward
is coming

Jeannie

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

Enough
Roganiz,
i'm not patronizing Anyone. but it seems the people who are doing all the shouting is the ones that are going hay wire. I'm just here like everyone else, God forbid, I don't use ugly words aganist people, that the difference with me, but if people would focus on poems and not the individual, everything will go accordingly. I have nothing aganist no one. people are blowing things out of wack here. focus on your work.name calling is for children. you don't know me, and I don't know you, you have good work, so focus on that and not childish things. like you said, every one has their own opinon, but people want let it rest, as of now, I will only delete the messages that I receive. time to move on, and make a name for yourself.

Jeannie

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

...
1) You are not capable of deleting responses to your post.

2) You have completely ignored everything everyone else has said, and reiterated your already flawed arguments

3) Your response to my post could, by someone with less optimism than myself, be interpreted as a threat.

( Posted by: Beckett Grey [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

Out of Line
Once again this is getting out of line. I'll delete this entire post if it continues. Let me address a few issues.

Jeannie, Lit.Org is a place to post your work to have it shot full of holes, and it can be brutal. If you don't want your work run under the microsope, this is the wrong place for your pieces. The comments up until your first reply were all honest attepts to help improve the work and not directed at you. I think you took some things personal that were not intended that way. To add to it, you posted on a pretty touchy subject which is bound to bring you some opinionated responses, wanted or not.

One other thing. I know of several members on this site who teach English or have a degrees in English - so take care with using a teachers grade as a defense.. just a friendly heads up ;)

To all:
Some of the replies after that got personal. DO NOT GET PERSONAL. Critsize the piece and if you find someone breaking the rules - tell me or one of the staff members and we'll do what needs to be done. People make mistakes, sometimes things get personal by an innocent mistake. Lets keep it civil, please.

( Posted by: Chrispian [Admin] On: July 22, 2003 )

Makes you tougher
I say what doesn't totally destroy, serves to make you stronger. Crowe has it right, this is a place to get objective opinions. Not a single person here has a personal opinion, nor feeling for the writers other than what is expressed in their writings. The work you have posted is from your heart, and is very full of many points. The problem I found is that it was hard to read due to some grammatical/editorial points. Use the chance to revise your opinion before posting, and be prepared for someone to note every little error. The beautiful thing is that its still your essay, you can do with it as you wish.
In a sense my answer is personal. I do agree that I have let you in on some of my personal feelings, however criticism is personal only because it is someone else's opinion of your hard work. Now go back and work just as hard.

( Posted by: Undogg [Member] On: July 23, 2003 )

Thank You
Undog;
God bless you, thanks for the encouraging words. Sometimes, that's all a person needs to hear to better them self.It makes me want to learn more and work harder at what I set out to accomplish.

God Bless You,
Jeannie

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: July 23, 2003 )





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