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Deep winter made Amelia Jesus.
"Mimi" to her friends, she skates the lake behind the farm
where no cows graze and no corn grows.
Walking on the water where
she'd dived last summer, touched the bottom,
swam to shore, kissed Donnie Blake
while they both dried in sun and breeze.

Sixteen soon, by next December she will drive
to see him weekends, stay the night, and maybe
maybe maybe maybe let him let him let him...

She slides a thin skin of change. A scant few inches
held between the piercing blue of Christmas sky and
a black like swollen pupils, grown to try
and catch the last pale winking light.

It never broke before.

"Wait until Christmas," was the rule. But whether
Mimi was a little heavier with muscle mass
from soccer and a lot of yoga
or the ice was thinner... still remembering a long
long Spring.

It didn't hurt. She wasn't even scared.
Couldn't feel the cold. Body soaked with shock
and chemicals and vertigo and
all she sees is white above. The pale
thin skin of change.

Her mother's shouts of, "Mimi! Mimi! Mimi!"
the last sounds heard as fingers tap
one last time
on something solid
and Amelia remembers,
"Oh, yes... Jesus dies."


I blog irregularly at TinkerX. I'm also on Twitter. @andyhavens, go figure.

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The following comments are for "Medium"
by andyhavens

over my head
there's something tragic here, I'm sure of it. Only, it's elusive. I'll read it a few more times and see if I can put my finger on it...

I love the form. I love the flow. It made me feel the setting.

I enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing.

( Posted by: Pablowilliams [Member] On: May 10, 2015 )

Skating on Thin Skin
Skate through Life...
on thickened skin...
Else fall through the cracks of change

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: May 10, 2015 )

Hi Andy!
Soo happy to see you back here Andy...Love haven't lost your touch! I see so many familiar faces here today...beginning to look like the old Lit once again!

Computer problems have kept me away...but hopefully...all will be resolved soon!


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: May 13, 2015 )

thanks, guys
I don't get alerts through email anymore when a post goes up or there are comments... so I hadn't even realized this posted.

Good to hear from you, Beatrice!

( Posted by: andyhavens [Member] On: May 30, 2015 )

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