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Losing names, waving
cash... chain-smoking dark cigars:
seeing by dark stars

like a blood-born bat
flying over a city
of the drug-lit now

purging old pathos
with Benzedrine-dazed day-dreams...
like a pure black rose

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The following comments are for ""Fix" Haiku Set"
by Seanspacey

When All My Feelings Turn Pale
The absence of color...
haunts the black rose...
leaving me feeling pale

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: May 3, 2015 )

Benzedrine-dazed day-dreams
Me, I'd remove change one of the darks to another word. But that is neither here nor there.

I like the in-the-momentness of this.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: May 3, 2015 )

good stuff, this.

Thank you for sharing.

( Posted by: Pablowilliams [Member] On: May 10, 2015 )

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