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I came to you
wanting to love
but found that
I'm still a child
looking for solid food
that has since dried up
and moved on
confident that I became a man
when in fact
I was doomed at the outset
and unable to grow
much less love
a soul
like yours

"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." Charles Bukowski

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The following comments are for "Jazz"
by pablowilliams

If Only Love Were Toothsome
The Source of Love...
Is found in the Heart of Hearts...
What do you think Souls are made of...?

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: April 30, 2015 )

Yeah Pablo... I respect you and so gladly read your concise poem, which seems profoundly 'confessional...' Anyway, bless you man

( Posted by: seanspacey [Member] On: May 1, 2015 )

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