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Reflection
by Lemon (Member) - published: July 22, 2003
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Category - Poetry
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Rear-view mirror,

Eyes like steel;

Face in the looking glass,

Like something unreal.

Every day I see it,

Curious when I see,

The reflection of myself,

In the mirror, but its not me!

Other people’s faces, in someone else’s mirror;

No one likes to think that they’ve already disappeared!


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"Believe everything" -Neil Gaiman, 'American Gods'


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by Lemon

Cute
How cute I like it.

( Posted by: lovesessence [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

...
chilling...

( Posted by: penumbra [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

Sing song
This could actually be turned into a song if one was willing to take it there. Very nicely done, unique without sounding weird.

~Jessica

( Posted by: Jessicanm [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

the poem
I'm not sure if everyone got this but I wrote the poem using an idea I got from a website, where the beginning letters of each line are the letters of the title of the poem. You pick a random word as a writing excersize to get creativity flowing...I actually liked the poem so I posted it here. What's interesting is the responses seemed to have varied so far.

( Posted by: lemon [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

REFLECTION
Sorry to say I didn't see it until you pointed it out. It's clever but it might have helped to put the first letter in bold type. Can one do that? The space between the lines may take away from it as well.

( Posted by: Penelope [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

there is a name for it
I know what you're talking about. It's called an acrostic and there are several ways of doing it (as well as several types of acrostics!) Usually though the rules or standard for helping others recognize it (if thats what you want that is) is to make the title all caps, keep the lines close together, no double spaces or anything like that. I think the way you had it set up threw everyone off.

~Jessica

( Posted by: Jessicanm [Member] On: July 22, 2003 )

acrostics
Lemon~

I actually didn't catch it either, which is unusual for me. The fact that the title in addition to being the word you spelled, also ties the entire piece together thematically without requiring you to know it's an acrostic is the touch that makes this a excellent poem. Keep em coming, I would dare say you have a knack for this kind of piece.

~Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: July 23, 2003 )

i like this.
it's a series of strong images, leading upto a climactic image. i like the climax of rhythm that compounds the effect of the final image. strong.

chris.

( Posted by: chop_N_change [Member] On: August 27, 2003 )





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