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1.1 INT/NIGHT RESTAURANT
Manager (male the rest is irrelevent) is showing Hasanna
(30ís black female. Pretty) this and that. Hands her a
stack of paperwork for her to fill out. They go towards the
1.2 EXT/NIGHT OUT BACK OF THE RESTAURANT
John (30ís white male) is sitting out back smoking a
cigarette, wearing his "once a Marine always a Marine"
hat. Visibly worn out. He glances up as Hasanna and the
Manager come out.
You can sit out here, and finish up
that paperwork. After you can go
ahead and come back inside to watch
the videos etc etc.
Sounds like a barrel of monkeys
Yeah. Real fun. Johnny. Breaks
almost over. I got a ton of shit
for you to do when you get back on.
John acknowledges with a nod.
You got five minutes. Hasanna, did
you need a drink or something?
No Iím good thank you.
At the mention of the name "Hasanna" Johnís head snaps
up. She gets started on her paperwork, and he is steadily
peering at her, then he recognizes her.
John pulls his hat off.
They each squeal with delight, get up and hug.
I never thought Iíd see you again.
same here! So how have you been!
what have you been up to?
Uhmm. Got married, divorced,
married again, divorced again, got
Jesus. Busy bee huh?
Just one. His Daddy... heís in
Oh shit! Iím sorry.
Donít be. He almost killed
me. Heís where he belongs. (BEAT)
How long have you been working
Too fucking long. Been here for
two years, no promotion no raise...
He keeps telling me heís going to
make me shift lead but... I dunno.
Thatís sucks. Iím kind of in the
same boat. Is why I got this job.
Making ends meet?
Yeah. I canít really get much help
from his Daddy so...
Yeah I donít know.. it just seems
like life when we.. we were
together life just seemed...
Exactly! It just seems like since
then life has been (laughs) a
comedy of errors.
Everytime a light at the end of the
tunnel comes, it turns out to be a
They are just staring at each other with giddy smiles on
their faces. The moment passes, and John (uncomfortably)
So.. what happened?
with us. I mean. We were kind of
a thing.. right?
(smiling to herself)
Yes John. Yes we were.
1.3 FLASHBACK (1) INT/NIGHT USO DANCE
We see John meeting Hasanna for the first time. Sequence of
laughing, flirting, dancing. The relationship visibly
1.4 FLASHBACK (2) INT/DAY BARRACKS
We see varied phone conversations between John and
Hasanna. Maybe some "I love you tooís", the phone ringing,
and John running to answer it, etc etc
1.5 EXT/DAY FLASHBACK (3) BARRACKS
We see John shooting the breeze with a couple fellow
I donít know man. Itís like...
sheís so fucking perfect. Sheís
smart, and beautiful... and I.. I
donít know I just feel like Iíd be
dirtying her you know?
Fuck that. Iíd pop that ass.
The rest laughing. John is pissed.
Well ainít you fucking
sensetive? Whatsa matter? Blue
balls making you soft?
John cracks Miller on his jaw, fight ensues.
1.6 INT/DAY FLASHBACK (4)CAPTAINíS OFFICE
John is at attention for what is obviously non-judicial
proceedings stemming from the fight. Miller stands next to
him with two black eyes. Captain says some
things. Dismisses them.
1.7 INT/EXT DAY
We see John buffing the floor, digging foxholes. Being
1.8 INT/DAY FLASHBACK (5) FRIENDíS HOUSE
John and Hasanna are sitting with each other watching a
movie on tv. Friends are all around etc. We see John
whispering to Hasanna, and hand her something. Her face
lights up. John calls for attention.
Hey guys. I just wanted to tell
everyone that we uhmm...
Johnís being shy about it so he clams up, the crowd of
friends expectant starts in on him. Hasanna (beaming next
to him)takes up for him by holding up her left hand. Itís
not an engagement ring, but itís a nice promise ring.
Crowd reacts seperating into their respective crowds. The
ladies gather around Hasanna and ogle the ring etc.
The men clap John on the back and congradulate him etc.
Phone rings, and is for John. He goes to it as the party
commences around him. He speaks quickly, sharply, then
hangs up. He looks to Hasanna, eyes are suddenly sad. He
moves to the bedroom for privacy. Hasanna slips out to
1.9 INT/DAY FLASHBACK (6) BEDROOM
John is on the phone sitting on the bed writing info down,
as Hasanna slowly & quietly enters.
Yes Sir. (BEAT) Yes Sir.
Hasanna gets his attention, and he mouths the words, "Red
Cross". She knows what that means to a Marine. John hangs
Are you alright?
No. Itís my brother.
John gets back on the phone. Hasanna softly sits next to
him on the bed.
Dad? (beat) Ok. (long beat) So do
you want me to come to Florida or
John is holding the phone a bit away from his ear so we can
Home. Go home Johnny. Weíll fly up
Ok. I love you. (beat) Bye.
John hangs up the phone. A moment of uncomfortable silence
I gotta go.
FADE OUT TO BLACK
2.0 EXT/NIGHT BACK OF THE RESTAURANT
I gave you my Dadís number when I
was leaving. I just.. I donít know
if I pissed you off or something,
or you met someone. or
FADE IN FROM BLACK
your parents didnít like me, but I
figured you met someone...
JOHN! You never even met them, and
YES I did call.
I didnít get a message that you
Hasanna clams up.
Iím sorry I didnít mean to..
(waves him off. Sheís
suddenly sad and woeful)
Ok ok! I believe you I just.. I
never got a message you gotta
Johnís confused. Thereís something in her voice.
Then what happened?
I called and I talked to your Dad
for a solid hour John.
He never told me. (beat) Maybe..
maybe he forgot. Rough time you
know? Burying your son.
What is it?
Well. We talked for an hour.
Yeah you said.
Yeah. and when I was getting ready
to hang up your Dad..
We see Hasanna telling the story, but the words are V.O.
so what was your name again honey?
Hasanna. Thatís pretty. French?
No. Itís Swahili. It means, "she
oh (beat)Swahili like
Africa? Shaka Zulu?
Yes Sir. Itís usually used for the
first born of twins, but Iím not a
oh. Learn something new everyday!
Yes Sir. So if you could just let
him know I called.
So youíre African?
No sir, but I am black.
Y..Yeah Iím here.
So yeah.. If you could just tell
him I called..
I sure will.
2.1 INT/DAY OR NIGHT FLASHBACK (7)
We see Dad hanging up the phone. A message scrawled on a
bit of paper. He takes a pause, then crumples it up and
throws it in the trash.
2.2 EXT/NIGHT BACK OF THE RESTAURANT
So you think he didnít tell me on
I donít know John. All Iím sayin..
Thatís not possible.
The conversation gets elevated for a second.
He voted for Shirley Chisolm for
chrissake! He.. he walked with
blacks in the 60ís! Do you know
how hard that was in Boston then?
Hasanna understands what heís going through.
He.. he canít be...
But I loved you. I..
John realizes itís true.
Iím so sorry Zanna. I.. I canít..
Donít be sorry.
He canít help it though.
How can I not be? I mean..
(INT with a hug)
Johnny. Look at me. Everything
happens for a reason.
Yeah howís my Dadís prejudice for a
Because we werenít ready for each
other. We were so young! Thereís
no way we could have appreciated
each other. We had to learn.
Learn how to truly love and
appreciate someone. (BEAT) If itís
Hasanna pulls out her necklace. Attached is their promise
I never forgot about you.
Anyway. Donít you think itís weird
that after all this time, here we
Maybe we could..
Johnís getting shy again.
Manager comes out in a hurry.
Johnny! What the! Get your ass in
here weíre getting hit. And stop
Fraternizing? You shittiní me?
Does it look like Iím... "shitting"
you? Managers arenít allowed to
have personal contact with hourly
Take your apron off. Youíre shift
leading tonight. Once the rush is
over weíll get your paperwork
signed. Hasanna letís get on them
John & Hasanna share a moment. He starts smiling again.
Looks like your luck is changing.
Theyíre holding hands. Just looking into each otherís
eyes. She breaks the moment.
Iíve got to get going John. (beat)
Hasanna slowly lets go by walking away, leaving John
contemplating about work, love, life and itsí strangeness.
(Stops at the door)
Rings donít belong on necklaces.
He turns her around, unclasps the necklace, takes the ring
off, and slips it onto her finger. She slips him a quick
Is that fraternizing?
Just as she enters the door she looks back, and
smiles. John sees her face meld from today to then.