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There is a girl far abroard
in many ways i know shes board
All the humdrum in her life

nothing interesting meaningless
Throwing the dice what numbers will it be?

her destiny?

Stable job
Money wealth
food on the table

Outward Smile inside Frown
Happy Go Lucky
Merry Go Round

thoughts in her head
Masked very well

her outward Smile can you tell?
covers torment of the inner hell
An inside fire smokeless burning pit

some may never understand
Some just live with it.


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The following comments are for "outward Smile"
by Zeus

you're playing with wonderful ideas here. I can feel what you are trying to convey; but something is missing.

I really liked "humdrum in her life" and "some may never understand.."

I remain close. Thank you for sharing.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: November 26, 2014 )

Hi Seeds Thank you for the input and Comments'
what's missing is the story behind the poem maybe?

This poem relates to a woman who lives in another country, she has everything she needs in life yet is a slave to her work,

she has a very dark past & covers it very well, with a smile.

She wants to break away from her life as it is,
That will involve a total change sometimes throwing the dice is the risk one must take at times in life,

This is a True Story
Thank you

( Posted by: Zeus [Member] On: November 27, 2014 )

Bend Me a Smile
Is a Soulful event...
Unless the intent is bent

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: November 27, 2014 )

Bent Smile

Good to see you and I haven't forgotten to reply to other comments,

just been out of touch for a while.

Here's a bent Smile :) should last a while this Soulful smile :) if not walk the mile :)
Smile now Bent :)

Thank you

( Posted by: Zeus [Member] On: November 27, 2014 )

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