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night recedes

strident sounds
rise from this bed

every time I rise
birds are set free
without a landing place

every time I rise
the other side of the bed
is empty

every time I rise
it is at the mercy
of a ragged sun

rays of light
cajole with scanty
alms

and every
morning

bereft of
smarts

I gladly
accept





revised on
10/25/2014

------
"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." Charles Bukowski


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The following comments are for "Days"
by pablowilliams

Days
Love it, Love it, Love it. Don't change a fucking thing...I know the language is harsh but that's how strongly I feel it. Kudos on this one!!!!!

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: November 2, 2014 )

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David,

Thank you for the heart felt expressions. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Much love,

Abel Victorio

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: November 4, 2014 )

Wow Abel!!
Beautifully done Abel...could be my favorite of yous so far!

Soo happy to see you and everyone again at home on Lit!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: November 7, 2014 )

Many thanks
Bea,

Thanks for the support.

Much love,

Abel

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: November 28, 2014 )





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