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the shines in July and you remind me
of an opening flower of the spring morning
in the midst of summer.we talked once
and again several days later,you asked all
the right questions accept two...are you
happy?what do you want?i won't answer unless
you ask.i know exactly what i want...need.
do you?the wind off the bay exhales through
my hair,you should be with me and feel
the shine and ocean breeze on your body,
in your hair....breath the salty and dive
in the water while it's warm.dry yourself
near the shore,near me,near the ocean breeze,
the shines in...of July

------
ray yorba


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