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a/n: Not an official entry to the Write Off, but inspired by this week's theme nonetheless. Enjoy.

_Time to Clean the Windows_

I look at the sky and what do I see?
A speckled, cratered landscape;
Big and round and grey.

If I look closely, I can see
The impression of the surface;
Dimples and bumps and contours.

And if I stare long enough I can almost see
A face staring back at me;
Shadowy and blurry and faint.

I'm looking at my window; what have I seen?
The mark from a dirty basketball;
And my own dirty reflection.

Spudley Strikes Again

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The following comments are for "Time to Clean the Windows"
by Spudley

Honestly Spud, all this carousing and riotous living you've been doing lately, is leaving you not time for the important things of doing laundry and polishing windows. I'm sure the neighbors must be cluking!

In lieu of hiring a French Maid (Oo la la!) and because your mother has apparently HAD it with you, I guess it's up to Grandma to cross the sea and straighten you out! I=You'll have to wait awhile shedule is pretty full at the moment. My weekly rap sessions with the local champ and the lectures I'm giving to local fuddy duddies on how to loosen up, are taking most of my time. But I'll try to pencil you in.

In the meantime, SHAPE UP, before I have the local window police check up on you!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: July 16, 2003 )

*smiles* I don't know what you were going for exactly, but I foudn this piece charming. Both charming and hopeless. I frequently find things smudged and hopeless to possess a certain charm. I hope Granmda Bea doesn't get there too soon, before you can take another look or two out of your dirty window. this would've made a smashing Write Off poem.


( Posted by: Kitten Courna [Member] On: July 31, 2003 )

:-) thank you
Don't worry Bea - my windows aren't *that* bad! hehehe :-)

And thank you too Kitten. You never know: I might even try a poetry write-off one day. :-)

Thank you both.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: August 1, 2003 )

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