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There was no beauty until that night,
and all of creation knew that everything had changed.
The moon knew it most of all.
Realized it from the moment he gazed out
in disbelief .
There was one
more fair
where mortals are.
One with dark hair, and laughter.
One whose scent outed the rain as a fraud.
And whose softness also indicted himself.
"Imposter!".
There was no beauty until that night,
and all of creation knew that everything had changed.
The moon knew it most of all
and anointed her.
Relinquished her his all.
Wrapped himself in dark cloud,
and mourned.


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The following comments are for "Shadow"
by nativeokie

Outing the rain
Lilith popped into my head as I read this. Hopefully just thinking of her doesn't invite her to my door. Fingers crossed...

Good to read you again, Mr. Hall.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: December 15, 2013 )

Good to see your mug
but who is Lilith?

( Posted by: nativeokie [Member] On: December 17, 2013 )

Lilith
...who came before Eve.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: December 17, 2013 )

Who came before Eve
God, and the man Adam. Lilith sounds like a witch. The snake was before Eve. So Lilith was the snake? But this dark hair and laughter must be good, for the moon himself to bequeath upon her his all. Can the dark side carry the gentle glow of the moon upon it's face? I think not. ; )

( Posted by: nativeokie [Member] On: December 17, 2013 )

Francisco
Hope you know my comments were just to incite your banter, and I am sure you did. Just don't want you to think I meant it as offensive to you. Miss you more than I've ever missed someone who I don't even know is even real. Love you like a brother.

( Posted by: nativeokie [Member] On: January 7, 2014 )

Robert
I don't comment here as often as I used to. Lilith was my first wife.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: January 13, 2014 )

Lilith
Of course, foot in mouth. Never even knew you had been married. So, if this brought Lilith to mind, you must have been quite taken. And I am sure her beauty also vexed the moon. So Eve was your second? I thought you were just having a go with your dark persona. I think you are actually a very devout Franciscan priest (the non child molesting kind though). : )

( Posted by: nativeokie [Member] On: January 17, 2014 )





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