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Vance was mesmerized by the tune
whistled by blithe April and June.
The twin girls wore mauve lacy frocks
and fandango lily-white socks.
He shadowed them down to the brook
in hopes of a clandestine look
at their bare ankles and bloomers.

Vance was a pirate presumer
and a liberty taking crook
who would pen a peeping-tom book
to sell to sailors on the docks.
Some swore Vance should be locked in stocks
and force fed prunes from a swine spoon
for behaving like a baboon.

Those femmes were giddy consumers
of flouncing glad-rag costumers.
Alas, their silk purses were bare
so they'd sashay sans underwear.
Vance got a darling double moon
which caused a severe pox of gawks.
His sketches were gobbledygook.

The crude drawings lacked flair and dare
so the girls ducked lurid rumours.
Vance was the butt of ribald jokes
because his talent lay elsewhere.
Drawing nudes takes more than bloke strokes.

[an]Each line has 8 syllables, Three verses of seven lines and an envoi  of 5 lines that tell a story

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The following comments are for "Enchanted Vance"
by Pen


An outstanding piece of poetic funtastic poetry. Haven't been on this site in a while nor any site for that matter- writng lots but keeping them to myself.
It's always a pleasure in reading your poetry- it's pure and full of word magic...

my warmest
santo nicola (aka Bob)

( Posted by: TheRedCockroach [Member] On: November 2, 2013 )

Enchanted Vance
Great poem pen.

( Posted by: Michaelpatrick [Member] On: November 14, 2013 )

Swine Spoon
I don't know what a swine spoon is -- never heard of such a thing before -- yet it conveys its intention quite well. I hope you made it up, and there really is no such thing as a swine spoon.
Overall, another one of your fun romps, made all the more interesting as a period piece (bloomers & ankles).
The last line is great.

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: November 19, 2013 )


I had to look it up......

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: November 26, 2014 )

my warmest regards to all
Thanks Bob - I don't spend much time here myself but do post every once in a while. I've found a much more active site which keeps me inspired.
Hey Michael - it was fun to write despite being quite a challenge too.
Yo! Popeye! There is no such thing as a swine spoon - so - yes - I made it up.
Hello Eric - spooning now means something quite different than it used to. spark and spoon - courting and kissing [chastely] on the porch swing

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: November 26, 2014 )

I was just reading some of your poems, always a treat I mind you and I Just wanted to say hello how you been. Me I'm good.
I know I was away for awhile but now I'm back and things are looking up. Got lots to share. Hope to hear from you soon. What is the more active sit your on now?

( Posted by: Michaelpatrick [Member] On: January 18, 2015 )

Hey Michael
Good to hear from you - I'll send you a link to the other site via PM

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: January 18, 2015 )

Thanks for getting back to me It's good to hear from you. Well wishes.

( Posted by: michaelpatrick [Member] On: January 18, 2015 )

Good morning. Where do I find that link?

( Posted by: michaelpatrick [Member] On: January 19, 2015 )

IM messages
it's in your message inbox .. site's name is allpoetry - a search will find it easily.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: January 19, 2015 )

Got it, thank you Pen

( Posted by: michaelpatrick [Member] On: January 19, 2015 )

Girl power
Cute one Pen

( Posted by: chapter1 [Member] On: April 27, 2016 )

Hey there!
I forgot about posting this here! I had such fun writing this.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: April 27, 2016 )

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