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a lost soul with broken wings
stumbling towards the edge
you gaze out onto the beautiful, wild landscape,
with tear-drenched eyes
and see a utopia untainted by the miseries of life's experiences
where chilhood ideals are true
and hope and faith are in bountiful supply
looking back over your shoulder
you see the barren wasteland of reality
from whence you came,
bitterly thinking how hard you stuggled to reach this place
where a thousand broken hearts cry out
and personal demons nip at your heels
as you stand on the edge of this cold, bleak reality
you look longingly back onto the land of dreams
thinking about jumping
but so afraid of falling
on broken wings


The following comments are for "a lost soul with broken wings"
by Psyche

This was very interesting.I'm not exeperienced to comment but I do like it.You should have recieved more comments.

( Posted by: suez-q [Member] On: October 12, 2003 )

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