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I hear you clearer now...

Imaginary whispers through your thin blue lips.
You burn every unlit part of me.
Unclean visions sour in my head
Your empty breath haunting me deeply.

A blanket for your frozen body.
Fair skin growing further gray.
I pray to whoever listens....
Please take away her slumber.

She belongs to me.

Time to watch the stars die...


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