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when i died
i still woke up
then i realised
we'd broke up
why did i lose my life that night

had a dream, i was fishing
all the while, i was wishing
if i'd get what i wanted
a girl
a girl with a little more bite

while is seems, when you're looking
after years, try and hooking
a mermaid
that being said
she puts up a little fight

i tried so hard to get her
did my all just to catch her
and what did i have to lose
but she took off & swam
like an aquatic lamb
and so she became my muse

now she is gone
and so i'm alone
alone for evermore
and it all seems so dismal
so just call me ishmael
ok, just show me the door











------
J


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The following comments are for "oceanic letdown - lyrics"
by mercer102

Sharks And Scrambled Eggs
S'not sharks that pirates fear
when set adrift with their sunder...
Oh no! Pirates eat sharks for breakfast...
with eggs...!

Why it's Mermaids me deary...
that steer pirates weary...
And send them to their watery graves

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: July 11, 2013 )





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