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Replay
by rcallaci (Moderator) - published: July 13, 2003
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Category - Poetry
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Dreaming
Of summer nights
Holding you in my arms
Feeling your hot breath touching mine
Desire erupting throughout every part
Of what is us, untold passion
In unbridled fashion
Forever we lay
Dreaming



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by rcallaci

Great
How could you compliment my poetry when you have magnificent verses like these?

( Posted by: arkaleel [Member] On: July 13, 2003 )

hot summer night
On this hot summer night, your words are particularly enjoyable. A poem full of heat and sensuality. Very nice.
Score 8/10.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: July 13, 2003 )

Dreaming
Pretty impressed with the sentence structure - you have an interesting style going there too with words to match the tone well. I love the last two lines, though I think "lie" would be better (the way it is now seems uncomplimentary). Otherwise, great poem.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: July 15, 2003 )





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