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Into a world of scorn where everything is torn
Youre there doing your best to take control to feel whole
Like a fish in bowl lost deep inside a black hole
Before that faithful fall came as you hit the wall
Babe gotta let you know before I gotta go
And know that Its all a show yeah is all a show

Hes the man without a shoe
Trying to break through
Hes the dude without a home
Trying to atone
Like a killer on the run
In the midnight sun
Hes the dude without a bone
Coming all undone

Feel the terror of the flood in a pool of blood
Theres a cowboy on the hill waiting on a kill
A suicide thriller filled with good will taking a spill
Like a dream you were sold before you got too old
Babe gotta let you see before I set you free
And just go back to middle C yeah middle C

Hes the man without a shoe
Trying to break through
Hes the dude without a home
Trying to atone
Like a killer on the run
In the midnight sun
Hes the dude without a bone
Coming all undone




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The following comments are for "COMING ALL UNDONE"
by MTMarshall

Love to hear this sung!
"Like a killer on the run
In the midnight sun"
is like Robert W. Service meets Jim Morrison.

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: May 27, 2013 )

COMING ALL UNDONE
Thank you so ...Have to say your comment hit my funny bone..... and that is a good thing too.... :)

( Posted by: MTMarshall [Member] On: May 28, 2013 )





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