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If I skip sleep or refuse to take my
med's against my doctor's warning, I hear
radio voices at night in my ear;
the voices unhinge me as no one's nearby
when I'm bipolar as I fail to comply
with doctors' orders. It's common, I fear--
I am committed two or three times a year.
It puts my whole life on total standby!
Life with my disorder is difficult;
but it also makes life a real challenge,
a test to surmount--a thing to exult
in when I face it and no longer cringe
from my disease as some evil result
of fate that grimly has me on the fringe.

Ngoc M. Nguyen, 21 December 2013


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The following comments are for "A Bipolar Realization"
by Apple

A Bipolar Realization
there are some interesing parts and I would have played with them a bit more. I embraced this very subject in a lyric which is also posted on this site. I tend to stay away from autobiographical piece such as Sylvia Plath writes and prefer to write fiction regardless of the genre.. I imagine this to be pros poetry.... but in all honesty I cannot say it is poetic by its very nature as my ear says no... This seems to read as if one was making a statement in a narrative story and no more for me... I feel I need to hear at least a rhythm or musical pattern of verse to call it even pros poetry and thus far I don't seem to hear it.. I could be just as well wrong on the entire subject too wrong just as well.. I guess I am simply not accustomed to this genre of writing. Although, Poe wrote pros poetry... Thank you for sharing; I am sorry I could not be of much assistance.. Fondly, Teri

( Posted by: MTMarshall [Member] On: March 25, 2013 )

re: A Bipolar Realization
Hello MTMarshall,

Thanks for commenting! No, your ear is right--my poem does lack an obvious, consistent rhythm. I need to work on that next time, and pay more attention to my beats. I'm curious, what would you have done with it? Ngoc.

( Posted by: Apple [Member] On: March 26, 2013 )

A Bipolar Realization
I tend to write with a meter to begin with and by sound for the most part. Sound comes first for me then the story....

I think what you will discover at some point is your own voice.... It's almost like a signature in a way... And when that happens it all sort of comes together... You can see that signature in paintings, music, writing, etc.....

This is not the best example below but I would have gone this way in some fomrm... I based it on what you seemed to want to cover in your piece:

At times those voices keep me up at night
Brings me such a scare I can hardly bare
But, then my ear burns in their pure delight
There in the sheer madness in my minds eye
Rests the infinite treasure that's my side
So I must comply or else I might die
All alone fearing the worst I must hide
Passing on my lithium treats not a crime
Endless hours countless powers scream by
From manic to panic all on a dime
Unhinged in every extreme, hear my cry
See me, the hero, saving the planet
Then takes me from the heavens to the ground
Where every girl I know is named Janet
And back to that place where I cant be found

How I would said it above really might not help much I feel as that is my voice above.... As I mentioned above finding your own voice will bring you closer to where you need to be or want to be... If I were you I would play with sounds, meters a lot and try my hand at writing very structured pieces.... Structure and form is what it is all about.... Master structure and form first .... before you break or play the rules...
just a thought..

I consider what I do when i write is is me simply playing with sounds....

Fondly, Teri

( Posted by: MTMarshall [Member] On: March 29, 2013 )

A Bipolar Realization
sorry line 5 of the piece included n my last comment has an error, of course, the word "that's was should to be "by"... :)

( Posted by: MTMarshall [Member] On: March 29, 2013 )

A Bipolar Realization
Thank you, Teri, I like your suggestions (and what you've done with my poem). I will take them to heart and try more consciously to apply them to my future poems.

Btw, besides song-lyrics, do you write much poems or poetry? The reason why I ask is because you appear to know what you are doing and suggesting. Take care...Ngoc.

( Posted by: Apple [Member] On: March 30, 2013 )

A Bipolar Realization
I am glad I was able to give you something and that I made some sense.

Yes I write poems and have posted some on here as well.. I tend to prefer lyrics and some have been put to music... Lyrics are a form of poetic verse.

The more poetry your read the more you will really hear it and I feel your writing well do very nicely.. It's in the ear and reading the masters will greatly assist you... I count the meter every piece regardless how I hear as well... I do not write free verse be it lyrics or regular poetry


( Posted by: MTMarshall [Member] On: March 30, 2013 )

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