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And symbols for insects
The graying of the green
In the shadow of a complex
Section nine in exile
Probes the city in ashes
A strategic statistic
From the Capitol offense

Dark ages in the Twentieth Century
The slag of silent politics
Lingers in still air
Tangible instincts
Under Nurrunga skies
Tastes like metal
Something's missing in this mother####ers eyes

Declines to comment
Hidden in plain sight
Secret handshake
Pinstripes of the adversary
Carved into the race
Your password, please
For God and guns
Now the exit's out of reach
We play the record backwards
And bang our heads against the wall
Until our demons call us to the

There are cures for what's broken
But the system we've invoked
Is one sick joke
I'll see you on the breadline...

Beware the lollipop of mediocrity-
Lick it once and you suck forever.

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The following comments are for "Deadline"
by metrozol

give it to me rough
I felt the masculinity shine out of this poem. it reminded me alot of sin city ( and also sadly the current state of affairs in the news) . Excellent work with the imagery. words u used like metallic, gun, the lollipop ( like prostitution), dark ages, ashes, taxes, all very powerful and relevant imagery to colour this poem. I felt it rough n true. Love this style of writing. please lay another one of us next time :) Keep up the style. it suit u u say.....see on the breadline! :) LOVE THAT SENTENCE

( Posted by: Shaza89 [Member] On: March 12, 2013 )

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