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The bags that sag under glassy eyes are purple
black. His face is downward drawn with pencil neck
and bow bent back. Devoid of chest a mass of thinly muscled bone and flesh. He strokes Mary Martin at a
soirée by the garden wall. She sings lilacs to hummingbirds as rainbows rise and fall. She whispers wonders wrapped in riddles wove in layers, her looks, her touch, her smell, at a soirée by the garden wall.




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The following comments are for "Sally Martin"
by JackGrady

Sally Martin
I love the imagery. You word usage here paints an interesting picture. I really enjoyed the phrases that you used for description:

"downward drawn with pencil neck
and bow bent back"

"She sings lilacs to hummingbirds as rainbows rise and fall"

"whispers wonders wrapped in riddles wove in layers"

Websters defines description saying "to picture in words." You've done that masterfully here in my humble opinion.

Much Love,

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: January 7, 2013 )

Thanks
Hi Dave, thanks for the encouraging words. Happy New Year!

( Posted by: JackGrady [Member] On: January 7, 2013 )





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