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We are spinning

spinning around time

With eyes burning

yours burning like mine

We are spinning

spinning out of control

With hair glowing

black glowing charcoal

We are losing

losing our minds

Watch me fading

I am fading like blinds

We are losing

losing our lives

Watch skin melting

us melting like a cloud

We are dreaming

dreaming out loud

Who is screaming

you're screaming or am I?

We are dreaming

dreaming about time!


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The following comments are for "Out of Time"
by Paradox

oooh! Pretty!
Well, not the imagery so much as the way it flows. I found this a satisfying poem that invites the reader in for a closer look, despite the screaming, melting and whatnot. Good job!

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: November 8, 2012 )





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