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My old girlfriend
Noticed that
As she read
The pages of my life,
All I ever did was
Dot the i's.

And this made her feel
So lonesome and unattractive.
Which made her run
Straight into the arms
Of, yet, another guy.

Who, she thought,
Had the passion and
Ambition to fill up
Her life's trial ballons.
As, he lifted her into
The glory of the skies.

And made me wish that
I had never learned
How to dot those damn i's!

Ronald Peter Ciras

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The following comments are for "Transformer"
by moroccanron

yOU always seem to find that sideways look at things.

I kind of reminds me of people I knew in other placed, other times. If I had any ambition I might sit and wonder what they are up to now -- but I'm kind of lazy about caring these days.

3rd stanza, did you mean to spell "balloons" instead of "ballons"?


( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: October 14, 2012 )

Dottin i's and crossing t's

The teachers always had to earn their money with me.

Pointless having a dog and waggin your own tail (haha tale even)I thought writing was all about reading between the lines....

Yep Ballon is in the South of France...thanks Wiki


( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: October 15, 2012 )

Doting Eyes
Obviously, you still write the pages of your life in longhand. With today's computers, the i's are dotted for you. Of course, with today's computers, "ballons" should have been caught, as you posted this poem, by spell check. Anyway, if she was looking at your dotted i's, she wasn't looking at you with doting eyes.

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: October 21, 2012 )

Perfect Imperfections
Dot the i's
and cross the t's.
Make sure you get it right.
But the making of perfection
is only in 'your' sight.

A little imperfection
might seem to you absurd,
but I never could be perfect
in every single word.

Women all believe, of course,
the purpose of their life
is to change the man they care for
and to make a perfect life.

So the i's and t's unfinished
are the reason that she stays,
for her effort to perfect me
will last for all my days!

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: October 21, 2012 )

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