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I will be your foundation
Like a rock beneath your feet
I will be there for every worry that you meet
My heart will lift you up on summerís wings
And carry you safe away

My heart does know
Every line upon your face
Where toil and worry have left a trace
I would give you comfort in any way I could
And carry you safe away

We come into this world
Some never find a place
Not like some who always win their race
I would lift your burden along that road
And carry you safe away

OH wonít you let my love come in
Warmth to give your soul a rest
Let go those tears you hold
Lay your head down upon my chest

My hands have labored
Hard all of my days
And now my love come share my ways
Let our love carry us up on summerís wings
And carry us safe away

To hear: http://soundcloud.com/kenlehnig/summers-wing-safe-away

ken lehnig(c)2012 Deaert Windsong Publishing

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Why is doing what you love the hardest thing to do? Is it because failing what you thought defined you would be too devastating a thing from which to recover? If so, we stay where mere accident has left us.


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The following comments are for "Summer's Wing/Safe away"
by jonpenny

And carry you safe away!
Love the repeat at the end of each verse. Makes the song for me!

As usual...you've done it again!!!!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: August 4, 2012 )

RE: Summer's Wing/Safe away
A lovely piece; enjoyed having the opportunity to hear the song; wonderfully written. -Joe

P.S. I'm curious as to why you felt the need to change the format of the fourth stanza. Here's my suggestion:

OH wonít you let my love come in
Warmth to give your soul a rest
Lay your head down upon my chest
Let go those tears you hold
let me carry you away


( Posted by: jjbreunig3 [Member] On: August 23, 2012 )

I hear Dylan, People.
Of course your voice is more harmonious, but the delivery style here, reminds me of Bob Dylan. Very nice!

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: August 23, 2012 )

^
One happy significant other! Good piece and heart warming.

( Posted by: NucleusFire [Member] On: August 29, 2012 )

This is calming.
I just love this part of the song:

"My heart does know
Every line upon your face
Where toil and worry have left a trace
I would give you comfort in any way I could"
The metaphor seems excellent to me.

Can I ask what do you mean by "My heart will lift you up on summer's wings"?

I'm having difficulty understanding this part:
"We come into this world
Some never find a place
Not like some who always win their race
I would lift your burden along that road"
What do you mean by some who always win their race? what race? life's?

When you say "that road" it sounds to me cryptic, like it's a code between you and someone else who knows what you are saying, that is the feeling I have, though I think I might be wrong.

This part of the song is the most beautiful in my eyes:

"OH wonít you let my love come in
Warmth to give your soul a rest
Let go those tears you hold
Lay your head down upon my chest"
(let me carry you away) I think Beatrice's suggestion's is good, and this line would be a nice addition.

One last question, Why do you say "Carry you SAFE away?" why do you use the word "safe"? It sounds like if you just say "carry you away" it might be dangerous for the person you intend to carry away.

( Posted by: ilgaar [Member] On: December 24, 2012 )





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