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[.my.spacebar.is.malfunctioning.]

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baptism.by.mire

i.love.my.washington.park
as.the.sun.sets.just.before.dark
i.peer.at.the.pond
through.the.thrushes.and.fronds
and.there.spy.a.minnow.or.carp

so.while.staring.out.o'er.the.lake
my.cerebrum.started.to.ache
was.it.merely.a.whim
to.go.for.a.swim
or.was.it.a.psychotic.break?

a.drop.in.that.drink's
not.at.all.what.you'd.think.-
it's.a.murky.malod'rous.morass
and.i.thank.and.i.pity
the.kind.fellow.who.did.me
the.favor.to.save.my.poor.ass

oh,.for.goodness.sake
i.jumped.in.the.lake
but.some.days.have.passed.by
and.now.i'm.all.dry

it.would.be.quite.erroneous
(if.not.sanctimonious)
to.stand.up.and.shout.out,."i'm.cured!"
or.to.say.that.this.dip.for.me
represents.some.epiphany
and.not.merely.a.shock.i.endured

see,.it's.not.that.it.has.to.be
such.a.bloody.catastrophe
to.find.oneself.thusly.submerged
it.is.not.so.abysmal.-
think.of.it.as.a.baptismal!.-
for,.though.damp,.one.has.safely.emerged

was.it.such.a.mistake?
can.you.figure.out.why
i.hopped.into.the.lake?
nevermind,.i'm.all.dry

-j

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J


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The following comments are for "baptism.by.mire"
by mercer102

Baptism by humor
Formatting aside, I loved this! Thank you for posting. It gave me a smile to start the day. The poem is joyous!

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: July 28, 2012 )

In The lake
I loved this - who knows why we sometimes do what we do. And if we do something untoward I love the grace here to just accept it , give it meaning and move on. I"m not sure if the formatting and little 'i's did the piece any good - I guess there is a bit of theater in it.It would stand well without the 'poet as artist' thing.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: July 28, 2012 )

irksome.quirk .......
Loved the poetry could have done without the dots. If it has significance .............. it was lost on me. Don't care much for the lower case self deprecation either.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: July 28, 2012 )

baptism.by.mire
sorry.about.the.formatting.-.nothing.for.it.....lowercase.is.not.for.effect.but.out.of.sheer.la-iness.(by.the.way,.my.26th.letter.doesn't.work.either!)...thank.you.all!

( Posted by: mercer102 [Member] On: July 29, 2012 )





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