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I drew a line for you a long time ago,
yet I`m the one moving it closer to you every time.

The bubble we had created,
seems to burst and explode into a million
pieces, over and over again.

I drew a line for you and now its my line
Yet I still want you to walk it with me.

The comfort that is created when we fall into eachothers
arms, now puts me in a somber mood.
It is just the reflection of a long past time.

The line that I drew seems faded now. Are we in our bubble
again, or has it burst into a million pieces?


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The following comments are for "crossing the line"
by Puck

it's the 4th of july
and i just finished read your fine poem. it's simple and charming. it has feeling.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: July 4, 2012 )

As I read this I knew exactly what you meant and was relieved I wasn't in such a predicament. Well put with one minor flub which didn't detract from the poem.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: July 6, 2012 )

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