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At dawn the clouds spill in the valleys
Giving it a sip of dew as they sink
And the mountains extend its neck
Over the top of these clouds
Seizing the chance to be more lofty
Cause the proud must come low
And the lower must get respite
As the cycle moves
And the grains fall in the hourglass
I look around to see
That the clouds are under me

George Gardashian

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The following comments are for "The Clouds"
by arkaleel

very mystical...

( Posted by: C.L. Mareydt [Member] On: July 30, 2003 )

A good short poem. I would think about changing the "cause" to something formal, as everything else is written that way, and the word sort of sticks out, but a good relaxing read

( Posted by: CaptainKeyboard [Member] On: March 9, 2004 )

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