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I sailed unaware into
the ocean currents
of her life;
and smitten, I
desired to ride

them with her;
somewhere
along
the ocean ways, a

seed of love

planted in the soil of
my heart had taken root,
and grew, only to perish
like

a young hope

that's fleeting:
though I loved her,
she still wounded

me like a careless
knife.

In spite of
God and my
conscience, I
looked

for encouragement
in her stare;
and at the outlines
of her appealing
form

I did wonder:
she was

indeed

a Helen of Troy, a prize,
on whose loveliness
I

so richly gorged!

But never was
a lonely man
more wretched
than

I,

as she could
not return my
affections with
equal measure

of feeling.

I would be more
glad had she been
unwedded to another,
and could

easily be within
my desirous
and
hungry

grasp!

In time, I
never

saw
her again;

and love--like
an aborted
fetus--died

with her leaving
as well!






------
"Good verse, like art, is difficult."

--ngoc m. nguyen, aka "poembender"




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The following comments are for "A Seed of Love Planted in the Soil of My Heart"
by Apple

no idea
what on earth is a woman with a toothsome form?

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: June 25, 2012 )

re: no idea
A nice body? Curves? etc.

( Posted by: Apple [Member] On: June 26, 2012 )

apple
a woman who likes to be bitten?

But of course, "I did wonder" follows this...

You're glued to 400-year-old usages.

Maybe these usages don't go over as easily 400 years later...

Maybe, in 2012, there's a more reader-friendly way to allude to sexual attractiveness.

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: June 26, 2012 )





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