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I am wearing grey
A grey dress dotted with withered white daisies
And grey sandals that show
The dead whiteness of bare toes
I cover myself in a grey slicker
Today- I am lost in its voluminous folds
As the delicious breath of rain
swathes the Metro’s sodden streets
and ladies and older women battle colorful umbrellas
the usual reds, pinks and yellows
stray dogs, pitiful wretches scamper for cover...



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The following comments are for "Grey"
by Shakti

Soaking rather than rain-soaked
I agree with Lucie. I thought it was pleasingly vivid in its description, but stronger with the rain only referred to at the end.
Umbrellas gives you all the clue you need to proceed.

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: June 18, 2012 )

spot on
i get what you mean...i did just that and i can how it all flows better..thanks for the comments

( Posted by: Shakti [Member] On: July 29, 2012 )





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