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Midnight beyond thought
(1 Jan. 2012)

Come midnight
I let you stroke the hour hand,
first gently and then bordering on disgust
as the last of the ticking sounds became
an incoherent logic.

What language is this?
you asked my closed eyes.

It is a new beginning,
I replied, remembering my place
inside you with my tongue at low tide
and the jealous moon tangled up
in its swollen lies.


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I will never write like you and I hope you never write like me.

"...the only war that matters is the war against the imagination--all other wars are subsumed in it..." -Diane di Prima




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The following comments are for "Midnight beyond thought"
by toscano

WOWSER!
This really resonates with me even though I wouldn't allow a ticking clock in my abode. Those stripped down seconds which seem to be strung out on opium or maybe mucked up by molasses. Treacle Time! There I go again with that alliteration! That's what it's called... right?
Love this .... not too much ... you nailed it!

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: June 9, 2012 )

Come midnight
I actually do have a grandfather clock in my living room, Pen, but I turned it off years ago. It's just there for looks these days. The one thing I can't stand having are mirrors everywhere. I only have one and it's my bathroom.

Thanks for reading.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: June 11, 2012 )

tic tic tic
Very beautiful and virile, this. Bravo!
I mirror your mirror attitude, as well. I suppose women have more things to check and maintain through the day, but once I brush my teeth and comb my hair, the only reflection I have need for is in my verse. (Sometimes, when my hair is short, I don't bother combing, and, thanks to safety razors, I shave in the shower by touch, not sight).
This is not to say I'm not vain, however.

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: June 11, 2012 )

Randy thoughts
very sultry, sexy, and yes Kinky writing, but in a very natural way. IT reads just like the title says "beyond thought". But to get beyond thought one must travel through the mire of all other thoughts, and I think you picked some nice lines to travel with. I like "you asked my closed eyes", exept I would keep it present tense (ask),

and tongue and low tide and a jealous moon, very, very beyond.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: June 13, 2012 )

at low tide
Thanks James, Lucie and Brian.

This was my first write of the new year. Thought I was off to a grand start but am in writer's block mode at moment, with a stack of unfinished projects gathering dust.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: June 14, 2012 )

Pages Missing


Lost me and even the comments didn't enlighten me...

Unless it's a mermaid down at your beach hut giving you a hand out

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: June 14, 2012 )

new beginning
Just starting the year with a smile, Eric. Thanks for dropping by.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: June 15, 2012 )

between passing seconds and our thoughts...
I found an expressive balance here. I felt as both an usher as well as the tormented, as I read this.

Good stuff. I always enjoy your work, my dear friend.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: June 27, 2012 )

expressive balance
Just when I was thinking of laying low for a while...

I find Abel's comment - which I'd overlooked for some reason. Sorry 'bout that.

Thanks for finding expressive balance in this poem. Quick write for me. But I haven't written anything in weeks. Not one single word.

Thanks for stopping by, amigo.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: July 20, 2012 )

Chapter Uno
And thanks also to Sir Chapter1.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: July 20, 2012 )





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