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You just failed every single test
After giving you all my best
Off you went starting all that unrest
And then you took out all rest
Taking then all to task
Getting all obsessed with being possessed

Took a bullet to my chest
In my Sundays best
Took a bullet to my chest
Took a bullet, took a bullet
Don’t do me like the rest
Took a bullet, took a bullet to my chest

Like some guest on one of your lists
As you go on breaking my wrists
Adding all sorts of little twists
And everyone simply exists
As you sit there and bask
Burying yourself under piles of futile trials

Took a bullet to my chest
In my Sundays best
Took a bullet to my chest
Took a bullet, took a bullet
Don’t do me like the rest
Took a bullet, took a bullet to my chest

Now then with a turn of the page
As you are turning down the rage
Life becomes far more than a stage
And then you think you’re a sage
Hiding behind your mask
Getting all depressed going off on some quest

Took a bullet to my chest
In my Sundays best
Took a bullet to my chest
Took a bullet, took a bullet
Don’t do me like the rest
Took a bullet, took a bullet to my chest

Gave my all taking all your calls
Down endless halls in senseless brawls
Off crushing balls in bathroom stalls
And then you fell hugging the walls
Holding tight to your flask
Got no more to give no matter how you live

Took a bullet to my chest
In my Sundays best
Took a bullet to my chest
Took a bullet, took a bullet
Don’t do me like the rest
Took a bullet, took a bullet to my chest


Took a bullet to my chest
In my Sundays best
Took a bullet to my chest
Took a bullet, took a bullet
Don’t do me like the rest
Took a bullet, took a bullet to my chest

Took a bullet, took a bullet
Took a bullet, took a bullet
Took a bullet to my chest
In my Sundays best
Don’t do me like the rest
Took a bullet to my chest


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The following comments are for "“TOOK A BULLET TO MY CHEST” "
by MTMarshall

Got no more to give no matter how you live
The rhyming scheme on this threw me off a bit. Just seemed a bit forced. But, then again, I'd have to hear it sung to really get a complete understanding of it.

Other than that, it reminded me of a movie I just watched last night: Dear Wendy. It was supposed to be a sort of indictment of gun culture but was really just a movie of kids with guns. The lead character takes a bullet through the chest.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: May 23, 2012 )

gritty
Ditto with the meter for me. Fourth paragraph (minus the refrains). I do like the images though, well thought out! Very tangible and gritty.

( Posted by: Robert Walker [Member] On: May 25, 2012 )





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