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We are time and time again
absurd creatures.
I'd rather be called hopeful
than a sad excuse.
Lonely is how I felt before,
perhaps even afterwards.
Into one and then to the next.
What is it about a toxin that
we cannot escape?
I learned my lesson one
too many a time-
Wasted down to the lonliest drop.
Stare me down if you see a must.
But remember, we've all been there,
feeling foolish and ridiculously lost!


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The following comments are for "Three Sheets To The Wind"
by Zia

feeling foolish and ridiculously lost!
I liked this but felt like I was left hanging: Sad excuse for what? Into one and then to the next...what? Perhaps punctuation is the culprit here.

But, like I stated, I did like it. Has a weariness to it that I can relate to.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: May 8, 2012 )

"stare me down if you feel a must"... Like that fabric of words.

The theme is very accessible, though maybe a bit "rantish" for my taste. But, hey that is just me,

but it does carry a kind of pungency with it. Yes, we've all been there and only the truely courageous dare write about it with honesty.

nice work


( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: May 11, 2012 )

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