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fallen pink tendrils
rock hard grey landing softened
gravity blossoms

Penelope Allen
April 27 2012



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"Tigers bloom where there's oodles of room." Zodiac Zoo


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The following comments are for "April 2012 curtain call"
by Pen

Smile Rising
One must conquer the effects of gravity...
Just to raise a smile

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: April 28, 2012 )

@whippingflame
Many thanks for your comment. Made me smile. When I used to live in Vancouver my street had ornamental cherry trees along the boulevard. In the spring when they shed their rich pink blooms it looked like a wedding had swept by. Vancouver is a beautiful city for many reasons but I'm glad I'm now an island gal.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: April 28, 2012 )

Nice lines
Pen,

I will admit I do not really "understand" haiku, I mean I do know what the style is, and have even written one. Normally, I just don't "get" the haiku for some reason. This, though, is one that I do get. I think the last line is what brings it home for me, very nicely writ.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: April 29, 2012 )

@ Brian
I remember Bob giving me some pointers in haiku many years ago and off I went to think about the concept. I still don't know if I've got the true hang of haiku .. I'd hazard a guess that I'm missing some of the essence but Bob always says I'm doing just fine.

This one was a struggle for me because I wanted to project how entranced I am with spent blooms littering my yard and how they interact with the stones .. it never looked as ... um .. zen when my lawn was there.

I'm so glad you caught my drift .. thanks for letting me know.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: April 30, 2012 )





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