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Keep us in color. Mute
the traffic and sparrows
dominating the café trees.

Focus on the table,
how we stare at white cups
waiting to be filled, gold spoons
to be used, stirring in
more than sweetener, suave poise.

The waiter will come in moments
not seconds. We are left
to anticipate the scent
of espresso,

the tang of apricots,
and what must be said
about our union.

Clouds hang closer, pale
limestone gray
like The Church of The Holy Maiden,
La Doncella Santa
perched on the hill.

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The following comments are for "Silent Movie"
by Gwendrina

A successful experiment
Although I assume you mean experimental for you and your accustomed style. I was anticipating something more bizarre, when I saw the category -- words strewn about the page in a puzzle of meaning. I thought this was not only comprehensible, but transporting. Thanks for this morning movie.

( Posted by: Poeteye [Member] On: March 13, 2012 )

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